
How to Write a Motivation Letter That Admissions Tutors Actually Read
Learn how to structure a compelling IB personal statement and motivation letter. Get expert tips on using your EE, CAS, and TOK to impress university admissions.
How to Write a Motivation Letter That Admissions Tutors Actually Read
Let's be honest, after months of studying for exams, writing your Extended Essay, and juggling CAS, the last thing you want to do is write *another* essay. But your motivation letter (or personal statement) is your one chance to speak directly to the admissions team. It’s where you stop being a set of grades and start being a person they want on their campus.
So, what do they *actually* want to see? Forget the clichés. They're looking for genuine passion, a clear reason for choosing *their* course, and proof that you have what it takes to succeed. Think of this guide as your personal tutor, walking you through how to turn your IB experience into a killer application.
The Golden Rule: Be Specific, Not Generic
Admissions tutors read hundreds, sometimes thousands, of these letters. The ones that stand out are tailored. Generic statements are the fastest way to the "no" pile. This means you need to do your homework.
- Research the Course: Go beyond the course title. Look at the specific modules, research opportunities, and unique features. Is there a particular professor whose work excites you? Mention it!
- Understand the University's Vibe: What is the university's mission or ethos? Are they known for research, practical learning, or social impact? Show them how your values align with theirs.
- Connect the Dots: Clearly explain how *this specific program* at *this specific university* is the logical next step for your academic and career goals.
Structuring Your Letter for Maximum Impact
Clarity is key. An admissions tutor who has to struggle to understand your letter is not going to be impressed. Keep it concise (around one A4 page) and follow this simple, effective structure.
1. The Hook (Introduction)
Start with a bang. Don't say "I am writing to apply for..." They know that. Begin with a short, engaging anecdote or a specific moment that sparked your interest in the subject. State clearly what program you're applying to.
2. The "Why" (Body Paragraphs)
This is the core of your letter. Dedicate a paragraph to your academic background and relevant experiences. A second paragraph should connect your passion and skills to the specific course you're applying for. Use your IB experience here!
3. The Future (Conclusion)
Wrap it up. Briefly summarize why you are a great fit, reiterate your enthusiasm for the program, and touch upon your future ambitions. Leave them with a confident and memorable final impression.
The IB Advantage: How to Leverage Your Experience
Your IB Diploma has already given you the perfect material for your motivation letter. You just need to know how to talk about it. Don't just list what you did; reflect on what you learned.
| IB Component | What it Demonstrates & How to Phrase It |
|---|---|
| Extended Essay (EE) | Skills: Independent research, critical analysis, academic writing, subject expertise. How to phrase it: "My Extended Essay on the economic impact of post-war migration allowed me to develop rigorous research skills, which I am eager to apply to the advanced quantitative methods module in your program." |
| CAS Project | Skills: Leadership, teamwork, project management, community engagement, resilience. How to phrase it: "Organizing a coding workshop for younger students as part of my CAS project taught me not only how to manage a team but also how to communicate complex ideas clearly—a skill essential for a career in software engineering." |
| Theory of Knowledge (TOK) | Skills: Critical thinking, interdisciplinary perspective, questioning assumptions. How to phrase it: "My study of TOK challenged me to evaluate knowledge claims across different disciplines, sparking my interest in the intersection of ethics and artificial intelligence, a topic I was thrilled to see explored in your 'Minds and Machines' course." |
| HL Subjects | Skills: In-depth subject knowledge, analytical abilities, handling a rigorous workload. How to phrase it: "Studying History at Higher Level, particularly the focus on primary source analysis, has prepared me for the evidence-based approach central to a law degree." |
From "Good" to "Great": Before & After Examples
Let's see these principles in action. Here’s how to transform generic statements into compelling arguments.
Example 1: The Introduction
BEFORE (Vague & Boring)
"I am writing to apply for the BSc in Psychology. I have always found the human mind interesting and I believe your university would be a great place to study it."
AFTER (Specific & Engaging)
"Watching a documentary on the cognitive biases that affect jury decisions was the moment I knew I had to study psychology. The desire to understand the hidden mechanics of human behaviour led me directly to your BSc program, particularly your module on Forensic Psychology."
Example 2: Show, Don't Tell
BEFORE (Listing skills)
"My experiences have given me strong leadership and teamwork skills. I am also very dedicated and resilient."
AFTER (Demonstrating skills)
"Leading my CAS project, a 3-month initiative to create a community garden, involved coordinating a team of ten students and overcoming initial funding setbacks. This experience taught me the resilience required to manage long-term projects and the power of collaborative problem-solving."
Your Final Pre-Submission Checklist
You've done the hard work. Don't fall at the final hurdle. Before you hit 'submit', run through this checklist.
- ✅ Proofread. Then proofread again. Typos and grammar mistakes suggest carelessness.
- ✅ Read it out loud. This helps you catch awkward phrasing and sentences that don't flow.
- ✅ Get a second opinion. Ask a teacher, tutor, or parent to read it. A fresh pair of eyes is invaluable.
- ✅ Check the requirements. Is there a word or character limit? Stick to it. Is there a specific prompt? Make sure you've answered it.
- ✅ Is it authentic? Does this letter sound like you? Your voice should shine through.

Hi, I’m Manmohini, an IB graduate with 40 points, now studying International Relations and Global Affairs in Italy. I earned 7s in HL History and HL English A, along with an A in TOK, and I’ve been tutoring these subjects for around four years. My experience working with organisations like NATO and the United Nations has deepened my understanding of global issues — something I love bringing into my lessons to make learning more relevant and thought-provoking. I focus on helping students see connections between ideas, develop strong essay and critical thinking skills, and approach the IB with confidence and curiosity rather than stress. My lessons are interactive and tailored to each student’s goals, whether that’s improving analysis, refining writing, or mastering exam techniques. I see tutoring as more than academics — it’s about building perspective and empowering students to express themselves clearly while staying balanced.. When I’m not tutoring, you’ll usually find me hiking, playing new music, or planning my next travel adventure.
Why Lanterna?
While often used interchangeably, a motivation letter typically focuses on why you're a perfect fit for a specific program, highlighting your skills and qualifications. A personal statement is often broader, delving into your personal story, values, and the experiences that have shaped your academic ambitions. Both aim to convince admissions officers of your potential.
Leverage the unique components of the IB! Discuss how your Extended Essay gave you university-level research skills. Reflect on what you learned from a specific CAS project, showing leadership or empathy. Connect your HL subject choices and TOK discussions to your chosen degree to demonstrate deep, critical thinking. A Lanterna tutor, an expert IB graduate, can help you weave these elements into a compelling story.
The biggest mistakes are being too generic, simply listing achievements without reflection, exceeding the word count, and failing to proofread. Admissions officers want to see genuine passion and a clear connection between you and their specific university, not a template letter sent to multiple schools.
Our expert tutors, who are high-achieving IB graduates from top universities, can provide one-on-one support. They help you brainstorm ideas, structure your narrative, articulate your strengths, and refine your writing to ensure it's authentic and impactful. They've been through this exact process and know what admissions committees look for.
Lanterna’s IB consultation is a free, 20–30 minute online call with a Student Success Expert. It's a chance for students and parents to discuss academic goals, university ambitions, and any challenges. You'll receive a personalised plan with clear next steps to help you succeed in the IB and beyond.
Yes, it is completely free and there is absolutely no obligation to purchase tutoring afterwards. The goal of the consultation is to provide you with valuable, expert advice and a clear strategic plan for your IB journey, whether you choose to work with us or not.
It's wise to start thinking about ideas and drafting your essays during the summer before your final IB year (DP2). This gives you ample time to reflect, write, and get feedback without the pressure of coursework and deadlines. A consultation can help you create a manageable timeline.
Our Student Success Experts are highly experienced education consultants and former IB graduates. They are your first point of contact and provide strategic guidance during the free consultation. They listen to your needs and help map out a personalised plan to achieve your academic and university goals.
Absolutely. This is very common. Our tutors are trained mentors who excel at helping students identify and articulate their unique strengths and experiences from the IB. They create a supportive space to build confidence and help translate achievements from CAS, the EE, and coursework into a powerful and authentic narrative.
After the call, you will have a clear understanding of your priorities and a strategic plan to move forward. If you feel that one-on-one tutoring would be beneficial, your Student Success Expert can match you with the perfect IB tutor for your needs. However, the plan and advice are yours to use regardless of your decision.
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